Let Me Know What You Think...Again

[28 Flathead]

My wife makes Chocolate Chip Pancakes every Sunday, so......
I think I came up with the rhythm part to this first and worked around that.
The harmonies are all by accident, as they usually are in my stuff.
Anyway, let me know what you think. Your opinions are appreciated.

 

[Whitefang]

The main melody does get a bit monotonous, but it's pleasant structure doesn't grind one too much. And there could be more "activity" during the choruses. And perhaps a section containing a different key or tempo then returning to the main deck(so to speak). But all in all, was very easy to listen to, and as said, very pleasant. Much like chocolate chip pancakes usually are.

Whitefang

 

[28 Flathead]

The main melody does get a bit monotonous, but it's pleasant structure doesn't grind one too much. And there could be more "activity" during the choruses. And perhaps a section containing a different key or tempo then returning to the main deck(so to speak). But all in all, was very easy to listen to, and as said, very pleasant. Much like chocolate chip pancakes usually are.

Whitefang

Thanks Whitefang.
I agree it could use a different section, and more activity in the choruses, but I seem to have trouble coming up with a third part.
I am using a second key , or at least a modulation on this thing I'm working on now.

 

[Whitefang]

Can't wait to hear it.

Whitefang

 

[Fadtoz]

Good job.. Good tune.
That reminded me of a Blues tune my old band would play for fun. It was a Standard Blues jam.

Verse:
Woke up this morning and wanted myself a pancake.
I said I woke up this morning and wanted myself a pancake...

Anyway good tune man...

 

[28 Flathead]

Good job.. Good tune.
That reminded me of a Blues tune my old band would play for fun. It was a Standard Blues jam.

Verse:
Woke up this morning and wanted myself a pancake.
I said I woke up this morning and wanted myself a pancake...

Anyway good tune man...

Thanks@Fadtoz